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Is Harmony to Naive Ears A long time ago I lost the meaning. Something happened to me and I don't even know what. What I write has no story; no inspiration. Instead they are lines with words; a weak attempt in capturing emotion that I lack.


TheCrashing Sound of Love
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Hidden Warmth
I love days like this. When in between the frigid nights, we are all surprised by warm days. It makes me grateful for things I can't understand. The sort of quiet happiness that goes unnoticed.

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I love days like this.
When in between the frigid nights,
we are all surprised by warm days.

It makes me grateful
for things I can not understand.
The sort of quiet happiness
that goes unnoticed.







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Ode-Melody
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comment Commented on: Thu Dec 04, 2008 @ 11:26pm
This one is good. I rank it up ther with your newest work. The content is good and original. Perhaps lay it out in a stanza form though. I'd do it like:

I love days like this,
When in between the frigid nights,
We are all surprised by warm days.

It makes me grateful,
For things I cannot understand.
The sort of quiet happiness,
that goes unnoticed.

I changed a "can't" to "cannot" because good poems don't use contractions.


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