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Girl In The Forrest[inspired by Fevre Dream a great writer]
not long ago a girl enterd the forrest to find her lost dog but soon she would relise there would be no end to her journey she would never be ble to escape the dark forrest.she walked into the forrest looking for the dog.she began to call the dog over and over again.buster buster buster she bagan to weep as she soon relised she was lost deep into the forrest. it was dark and cold and she was scared helpless.a woman had found her asleep with torn clothing.the woman had thought that the child was dead but she soon relised that she was breathing and only asleep the woman had no children of her own so she took the child.the girls parents were worried so they bagan a search party but the forrest was to big for the child to be found.during the time they were looking the girl was happy she was found and the woman took care of her. eventualy the parents gave up but they never lost hope and never forgot her.for months they waited.the child had grown, always thinking about her real family and her dog but was to afraid to go back into the forest.she never left her house because it was in the forrest.she finaly got the courage to go out into the forrest but the woman would not let her.had the woman become crazy the girl wondered.she did not test the woman she stayed for a few more years.finaly she had turned 15 she wanted friends human company other than the woman.again she went to the door but the woman stopped her and said as long as she was alive the girl would not leave the house.every day the girl tried, harder and harder it became.1 day the woman had to leave the house but she could not if she wanted the girl to stay so she made locks and got boards of wood to keep the windows shut from the outside.she left the house every day from then on.she did what she pleased without worrying about the girl.1 day a young man about 15 or so came across the forrest and found the house.he went inside,and he found the girl and he thought she was the most beautifulgirl hed ever seen and she thought he was the most hansome boy shes ever seen but then she thought about it he was the only boy she had ever seen.but that didnt change anything they fell in love instantly.it was beautiful.but the woman soon had walked in he ran, maybe to never see her again the woman didnt know what to do.should she stay every day to keep the girl or should she leave every once in a while she had a big delemma. she decided that she would kill the girl and herself so they could be together for ever.the boy came back and just as he got in the house the girl was pleeding for her life the woman quickly killed the girl but the boy ran after her befor she could kill herself.he yelled you coward ur running away from life cause u couldnt hanndle that she wanted to leave for her true family so you kill yourself and her.she didnt want people to no quit yet so she killed him as well.but she did want people to know but not then later when people might forgive these things.the woman wrote a note i loved life but i loved her more i must leave this life shamefully and then she killed herself.to only have met the gates of hell as the boy and the girl ended up in heaven/shangri-la there spirits forever lived on in heaven happy to be together forever.i guess the message or moral of my story is commiting suiside will only make things worse for you hell has been given the description of its name its not a good place to end up so if you wanna kill yourself think of the consiquenses first or you can end up there as well.






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BladdyBladdyBlah
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commentCommented on: Tue Aug 28, 2007 @ 05:51pm
It's a good short story. It's sad but good. Congrats.


commentCommented on: Tue Aug 28, 2007 @ 09:31pm
I agree with Fevre Dream. It's a good, sad story. I like that you had a moral/point to the story as well.



moonwonderer
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Do You Beleave In God
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commentCommented on: Tue Aug 28, 2007 @ 10:02pm
aw so sad its very good


commentCommented on: Tue Aug 28, 2007 @ 11:18pm
that was really really long but worth it^^



darkjuggala
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Angel of the Blood Curse
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commentCommented on: Tue Aug 28, 2007 @ 11:31pm
kewl kewl i likey


commentCommented on: Wed Aug 29, 2007 @ 12:13am
where'd ya steal that from?



Twiztid Lil Ninjette
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Ojamagic
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commentCommented on: Wed Aug 29, 2007 @ 12:14am
sad story, though I really liked it xd


commentCommented on: Wed Aug 29, 2007 @ 03:15am
or another moral could be, dont go into the woods after your dog without your parents, and with your typing how long is gods name did that take you????? good story though



Spartan13Juggalo
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Evil_Eva78
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commentCommented on: Wed Aug 29, 2007 @ 06:22am
thank u lil that means it was real good right i made it but it was inspired by fevre dream duh


commentCommented on: Wed Jul 14, 2010 @ 11:05am
omg im such a gay fer im going through all these and omg i sucked..wow
lol thanks dante..



Evil_Eva78
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Evil_Eva78
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commentCommented on: Wed Jul 14, 2010 @ 11:11am
i have the worst grammar i have ever seen lord im embarassed reading this...thank god i was only 11


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