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Chapter 7
Syrin nodded. "yea. okay. Hold on please." Kakashi nodded back. "Okay. I'll meet you in the lobby."
"okay!" When he left Syrin took off Maaka and set her on the floor. "Oi! Wake up! I need you to get some bats together and clean this place up." Maaka smiled and bowed. "You're wish is my command!" Syrin sighed and went out but went back. "Oh! And another thing. Get some stuff in there too. Make it look nice." Maaka smiled again and started her magic. Syrin, on the way toward the elevator bumped into Kenya. Kenya looked at her and her face turned into a smug look. "You know, you won't be able to get him. He is already mine." Syrin, really not knowing what he was talking about, looked at her, looked at the elevator, saw it open and empty, walked over to it. Kenya followed her. "Hey! HEY!" Syrin turned around, right in between the closing doors. "Yes? What?" Kenya stood definitly at her and looked at her like she had two heads. "Something aint right about you, you know that? But I want you to remember. DONT TRY ANYTHING FUNNY WITH KAKASHI! HE'S MINE!" Syrin was getting sick of her. Besides the fact that she was getting mightly pissed for no reason, this girl was getting her very annoyed. Syrin sighed. Kenya, going to say something, got cut off by Syrin. "Look, I dont know how much you want Kakashi-sama, thats for you and you alone to know." She looked sharply at her. "But dont start telling me what to do. No one tells me what to do. Got it?" She glared at Kenya, using her vampire eyes, and Kenya took a step back. Syrin got into the elevator and was leaving before her hand stopped the doors. She stuck her head out. "One final piece of advice, if you love him so much, stop acting like a spoiled, shy-a** b***h and ask him out." With that she left, with Kenya in front of the elevators, cold.






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B_BChi022
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Wed Apr 30, 2008 @ 12:07pm


I have been reading them ( just haven't bothred to comment because I don't have enough time on my hands to say something about each one xP ) and they are good, but there's just two little problems with this and the other one.

I know they're in Tokyo and possible japanese anyway but where Syrin just suddenly addressed Kakashi as "Kakashi-sama" seems a little out of place from the rest of the writing. Also, Syrin tells Kenya to stop being a " shy-a** b***h and ask him out ", even though that's what she tried to do in the last chapter and it was blantly obvious that she was, that's hardly being shy.

I think what you really need to do is work on these. Look over the last chapters one more time before starting the next so you know what's happend and such. I'm not saying there's anything wrong with this chapter and you don't need to do it again.


mangabuff
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Sat Aug 02, 2008 @ 08:22pm


Hi everyone. I don't really know how many people have read this but those who have and cared i have discontinued this. If i ever re do this story i will probably make it better than what you see now.

Byez. oh..but i am going to make a new story. muahahahaha. hope you all read that.


cannibalize
Community Member





Sat Aug 09, 2008 @ 05:44pm


nuuuu!!!! DX now i dont nu wah ish gonna happeny!! ;~; T.T *sniffles* chu should realleh finish this storeh, i wunsh to see wah happenys!!!!!!! X_X


mangabuff
Community Member





Tue Aug 12, 2008 @ 02:40am


Okay! SO i have decided to just go and finish this story! Kakashi is now Kakashi Hatake no MInazuka or whatever..because well...its kinda confusing..so ha! there. it is now a fanfic. Thank you.

I changed my mind becuz of a good supporter...look up. ^ ^


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