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I just write to help calm my self down, so I'll write when I'm mad,sad or even bored. What ever comes out is out I write, so later I can laugh at my problems.
Feels Like Death
((Um hey y'all if you guys want to coment go right ahead ok... this is just a poem i wrote for my boy friend heart heart oh and ps can you guys rate it? please thanks 1-10 10 being great! ))

I close my eyes
My heart stops
I can't breath
I try to speak
I open my mouth
Not even a peep.

I feel him
The love of my life
I feel him wartm
And open my eyes
My heart races
I breath rapidly
The room spins
Then...
Darkness

No
I am not dead
I sit up
Open my eyes
I see him smile
His warm voice
Whispers into my ears
"I Love You."
I know
What happened
It was not death
But life,
Love...






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puka mix 69
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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 26, 2005 @ 01:38am
It's really very nice, a few things i can suggest though, that some of your words you might wanna choose differently, just to help it flow more, but besides that it's really good


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 26, 2005 @ 01:47am
well its supossed to be that way
thank you for the critisim ^^ i appriciate it

((holly s**t i can't spell))



lil_wicca4eva
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star son caelum
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commentCommented on: Mon Jul 18, 2005 @ 04:48pm
whoot, good


commentCommented on: Wed Mar 15, 2006 @ 06:22pm
u spelt warmth wrong but besides that from what i saw ts awsome



Krebhahn6_24_93
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