"When These Stars Fall"
Here we go again
another night of tears
You were the one hurt
Now it's the other way around
But...
When these stars fall (when they fall)
You will realize (realize)
That you are the only one
Only one for me
Heartache upon heartache
Tear upon tear
You still held my heart
In your palm
But you let it fall
Fall to the ground and shatter
When these stars fall (when they fall)
You will realize (realize)
That you are the only one
Only one for me
Just watch
Just watch the stars
And you will see
You will see what
You're doing to me
When these stars fall
Just as my tears
You will see
The Pain you cause me
When these stars fall (when they fall)
You will realize (realize)
That you are the only one
Only one for me
When these stars fall (when they fall)
You will realize (realize)
That you are the only one
Only one for me
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I really like it. But something odd about the very first verse, can't put my finger on it.
And I was thinking,
(only a thought)
When you say:
"Heartache upon heartache
Tear upon tear"
Maybe you should consider saying "tear AFTER tear"
So you don't risk sounding slightly repetative.
Just a thought. It still sounds good the way it's written.