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so anyway, i've also been accomplishing a TON for my D&D Campaign Setting....
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yay
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i wish i had some help with the novels i'm writing though.... you any good at ideas for filling out storylines? i just need to make it more engaging....
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"I won't regret, running away from here!" Sure.
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realy!? biggrin sweet! i'll send you the synopsis i have so far.
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first editor, now idea...
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oh that's right, i forgot all about the fanfic you and chi are doing. heh.. anyway.
Synopsis of War of The Brothers
Prologue
details the family arrangement, and the basic jyst of the characters' personalities. Star is oldest son, who is head of the Temple. he has a warped view of what is fair, and is self-absorbed. Dawn is second oldest son, and Captain of the Knights. he is naive, and has no tolerance for what he believes to be evil, which is anything that isn't in the code of the Knights of Nightfall Kingdom. Eve, the daughter, is a freedom-loving woman who seeks peace and liberty above all else. she is Captain of the Guard.
Chapter One
the king names his second-oldest son, prince Dawn, his heir. Dawn's older brother Star becomes jealous, believing that it is his birthrite to be heir. he declares war on his brother. Eve overhear's her brothers' argument and falling out and worries, but keeps the knowledge to herself, as she wishes notto be a tattle tail. she hopes to settle the dispute peacefully herself.
Chapter Two
Star is raising funds for his Campaign via the Temple. Dawn discovers this and declares war back on his brother. The Clergy is now very confused about what to do. they do not know who to believe, their leader prince Star, who is respected and influential? or the Crusading Knight prince Dawn, who has a reptation for absolute honesty but also for naivety? this conflict causes a schism within the Temple, and also all out war between the two brothers, who begin rallying armies and agents.
Chapter Three
Eve finally tells her parents, and the king and queen tell Eve that she must mediate the war and stop her brother's from killing eachother. the queen also secretly sends her personal agent, Silver, to guide Eve. she believes that this family crisis can be turned into an important lesson for everyone involved.
Chapter Four
the king is angry and refuses to deal with it in any direct way. he decides only to reward or punish as he sees fit at the results. his wife attempts to console him, swearing that good will come out of this.
Chapter Five and on
Eve attempts to seek a peacefull resolution, and enlists the help of a very colourfull bunch of people, mostly independant of eachother. meanwhile, her brothers begin their skirmishes and death theats, from assassination attempts to thefts. eventualy, plans for a battle on the fields are made, and a date for the showdown set. Eve's time is running out. she must convince her brothers not to fight, stop the suffering and warfare, and find some kind of peacefull compromise, all before a certain time. she seeks out her brother Dawn first, in hopes to make him see how rediculous he is being. at first he will not listen, and is appalled at how his sister would not stand up against evil. she introduces him to many of her own friends and allies, who were former criminals, or accused of evil or crimes, but who are good people. he insists that it is different. dawn later learns the full stories of many of Eve's friends and allies through their testimonies, and come sto understand better the motives behind many of the crimes he so naievely battled against. he realizes that not everything is as simple as it seems, and that nobody truely is evil because they think they are evil, but rather they think thy are doing the right thing. still, Star has yet to be reached, and it doesn't seem likely that he will give up his goal without a fight. as time runs thin and the battle draws near hope seems lost.
Last Chapter
To stop Star's Treasonous Campaign Eve must place her brother under a strict arrest, and strip him of all his titles and rights. this is contrary to her own nature and beliefs in civil and human rights. Star is magically captured and bound, and arrested without a hearing. his army is subdued somehow....
Epilogue
Dawn is undisputed heir to teh throne, and comes to understand his older brother's side of the story and point of view. he also understands how hard their actions were on the rest of th efamily, and how selfish they both acted. he appologizes to his sister, mother and father, and to all th epeople of Nightfall Kingdom. Eve comes to terms with her decisions, knowing that they were for the best. that she had to deny a person rights that he had abused in order to preserve the rights of others. a new head of the Temple is chosen.
Synopsis of War of The Brothers
Prologue
details the family arrangement, and the basic jyst of the characters' personalities. Star is oldest son, who is head of the Temple. he has a warped view of what is fair, and is self-absorbed. Dawn is second oldest son, and Captain of the Knights. he is naive, and has no tolerance for what he believes to be evil, which is anything that isn't in the code of the Knights of Nightfall Kingdom. Eve, the daughter, is a freedom-loving woman who seeks peace and liberty above all else. she is Captain of the Guard.
Chapter One
the king names his second-oldest son, prince Dawn, his heir. Dawn's older brother Star becomes jealous, believing that it is his birthrite to be heir. he declares war on his brother. Eve overhear's her brothers' argument and falling out and worries, but keeps the knowledge to herself, as she wishes notto be a tattle tail. she hopes to settle the dispute peacefully herself.
Chapter Two
Star is raising funds for his Campaign via the Temple. Dawn discovers this and declares war back on his brother. The Clergy is now very confused about what to do. they do not know who to believe, their leader prince Star, who is respected and influential? or the Crusading Knight prince Dawn, who has a reptation for absolute honesty but also for naivety? this conflict causes a schism within the Temple, and also all out war between the two brothers, who begin rallying armies and agents.
Chapter Three
Eve finally tells her parents, and the king and queen tell Eve that she must mediate the war and stop her brother's from killing eachother. the queen also secretly sends her personal agent, Silver, to guide Eve. she believes that this family crisis can be turned into an important lesson for everyone involved.
Chapter Four
the king is angry and refuses to deal with it in any direct way. he decides only to reward or punish as he sees fit at the results. his wife attempts to console him, swearing that good will come out of this.
Chapter Five and on
Eve attempts to seek a peacefull resolution, and enlists the help of a very colourfull bunch of people, mostly independant of eachother. meanwhile, her brothers begin their skirmishes and death theats, from assassination attempts to thefts. eventualy, plans for a battle on the fields are made, and a date for the showdown set. Eve's time is running out. she must convince her brothers not to fight, stop the suffering and warfare, and find some kind of peacefull compromise, all before a certain time. she seeks out her brother Dawn first, in hopes to make him see how rediculous he is being. at first he will not listen, and is appalled at how his sister would not stand up against evil. she introduces him to many of her own friends and allies, who were former criminals, or accused of evil or crimes, but who are good people. he insists that it is different. dawn later learns the full stories of many of Eve's friends and allies through their testimonies, and come sto understand better the motives behind many of the crimes he so naievely battled against. he realizes that not everything is as simple as it seems, and that nobody truely is evil because they think they are evil, but rather they think thy are doing the right thing. still, Star has yet to be reached, and it doesn't seem likely that he will give up his goal without a fight. as time runs thin and the battle draws near hope seems lost.
Last Chapter
To stop Star's Treasonous Campaign Eve must place her brother under a strict arrest, and strip him of all his titles and rights. this is contrary to her own nature and beliefs in civil and human rights. Star is magically captured and bound, and arrested without a hearing. his army is subdued somehow....
Epilogue
Dawn is undisputed heir to teh throne, and comes to understand his older brother's side of the story and point of view. he also understands how hard their actions were on the rest of th efamily, and how selfish they both acted. he appologizes to his sister, mother and father, and to all th epeople of Nightfall Kingdom. Eve comes to terms with her decisions, knowing that they were for the best. that she had to deny a person rights that he had abused in order to preserve the rights of others. a new head of the Temple is chosen.
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okay. what do you want me to do? add ideas? critisize it?
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well, i would like you to tell me what you think of it so far, and tell me what ideas you have for it. like what do you think it needs, or what do you think i should have happen where... ya know?
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kay....i like it so far. but stretch it out a bit. add lots of detail. describe the places, people, and personalities. use figurative language, and grab them in the beginning of the novel or they won't read it. go seek other advice as well.
hmm... ok. so i have to be crtain to use lots of detail when i write it then... okies, i'll save that advice. thank you so much sara, i realy apreciate the help! ^.^
