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This is my Journal I hope you knew that ...if you didn't then we have a lot to do.Well in my Journal i say how I feel or i just write in when I'm boried so good luck reading.For me life can be like a rollercoster I can have my best days or my worsted day.( my days are almost always bad just to let you know.... you didn't just read this read this) Ok try to enjoy my jorunals and plz coment on them!!!!!!!!!
Poems
1. Under the Spell
Cold be hand and heart and bone,
and cold be sleepnder stone:
never more to wake on stont bed,
never, till the Sun fails and the Moom is dead.
In black wind the stars shall die,
and still on gold here let them lie,
till the dark lord lifts his hand
over the dark sea and withered land.

2. Death in the Forest
In joy hast thou lived.Beware the Sea!
If thou hearest the cry of gull on the shore,
Thy heart shall then rest in the forest no more.

3. With You
Your eyes they glow under the moon,
To keep me safe from things all around.
Your lips i can feel on cold damp hair.
Hanging on to your arm I know,
if I close my eyes I'll wake up still with you.

4.I Know You Love Me
I felt like my heart was broken,
when you came you fixed it up,
putting every piece in its rightfull place.
You love me when I was being crazy,
or when I was mad at you,
because you knew I would always come running back to you!

5. Can't Wait For You
We lay and sit on the ground,
hearing sounds all around,
for hours we gaze in to the sky,
under the sparkling bright sun,
but now to leave and return back home,
waiting to see the sun rise,
fall a sleep dreaming of the next day soon to come.

6. The Fairies
The stars in the sky,
the grass on the ground.
The birds in the trees,
and creatures all around.
They do not hide.
They do not seek.
They dance in the night,
and sleep in the day out of sight.
They hold light,
and darkness in there hands.
The Fariy of Pure Joy,
or the one whos called Death.
They flitter and fly and float all around,
gracefully and lovly not making a sound.
You may not see them but they'll be there,
Waiting and whaching so do take care.

Plz tell me which poems you like by there numbers.
You can use my poems but just say that that I wrote them!!!
Thanks for reading and plz read my other journals. mrgreen






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Joeyfox18
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commentCommented on: Wed Aug 20, 2008 @ 11:24am
hail to thee oh maiden fair, the maiden with the long gold hair.
Entranced am I by word and verse, were it on offer I'd reach for my purse.
from one to five it twas divine, enjoyable and smooth.
With tongue on cheek, and quill in ink, I thought I'd write this verse.

hehe opps...Sorry ^^.

Lets see.
1 I liked, 2 I didn't like much....too short lol *giggles*
3. Lets see, I liked it, their were parts that flowed and rhymed etc, which is good for me smile , and so, yes I liked it wink
4. I like it, it's good smile ... However I think "because you knew, I would always come running back to you!" might fit better...maybe I;m just being padantic lol.
Anyway smile
I liked them all and Bravo.
*two furry paws, or two thumbs up* mrgreen


commentCommented on: Tue Feb 10, 2009 @ 10:36pm
I liked "Under the Spell" and "The Fairies." In "The Fairies," I think the last few lines should each be divided into two ("They flitter and fly/ And float all around/ Gracefully and lovely/ Not making a sound..." wink in order to flow smoothly and stick to the meter, because that's the direction the first portion takes. Also, "And sleep in the day out of sight" breaks the meter, although I'm at a loss as to what can be done to change it.

Keep up the good work-- your poems are lovely!
**** (four out of five stars)



Queen Watevra WaNabi
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