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Candles burn slowly
A light breeze ripples through the air
The candles burn out
Footsteps can be heard
Coming closer than you know
But whatever for?
You can feel the touch
You scream for the fun of it
What else could you do?
You soon feel nothing
And you know you're paranoid
But you felt the touch
You stand there waiting
Waiting for that touch again
But there’s no one there
- Title: The Cellar
- Artist: Twizlla
- Description: not really scary..but kinda intended to be..tell me if u like it or not..critic it please!!
- Date: 02/20/2010
- Tags: cellar
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Comments (1 Comments)
- nbetweener - 02/25/2010
- If it's meant to be scary, ditch the "for the fun of it" bit, number one. Maybe the light breeze bit, too. Maybe "a breeze whispers...a warning?" or something similar. If you are afraid, you don't wait for a second touch. The person is themselves not scared, why should we be?
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