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Knight:
To the young dame who once wrote,
"I love you without a second thought"
Here's my reply to you out of the blue,
"Fair-skinned maiden is this true?"
Maiden:
"Yes it's true o noble knight,
You are the one who gave me light,
And saved me from the dimming night
So now I see the world as bright."
Knight:
"How pleased I am to hear from you
That I have changed a lot of you
All I want is for me to view
My lovely maiden, I love you too!"
Maiden:
"If you love me, come with me
To the land where we'll be free.
There we will drink a cup of tea
While sitting on the top of a tree."
Knight:
"How I wish to come with my love
But I must depart like a flying dove
I still have an enemy that I must vanquish
Would you wait for me until it's finished?"
Maiden:
"Oh I will wait, for you I will wait
For I am sure it will not be too late
Come back to me for I will open my gate
Ready to receive you, and always be great "
Knight:
"For sure I will come back with my life
To you I promise to survive this strife
I will never fail you for my soul will burn
Until we meet again when I return..."

- Title: Passionate Medieval Love
- Artist: Archille
- Description: A young maiden fell in love with a noble knight. One day the king's army was given a mission to defeat the threatening barbarians in the south of the kingdom. The knight told the maiden that he must go. This is the conversation of the two lovers tragically torn apart by war.
- Date: 02/21/2009
- Tags: love epic maiden knight promise
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Comments (7 Comments)
- jgirl39 - 03/03/2009
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Keep your rhyming consistent!!!
Also, the maiden seems a little dim...
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- Faded Dreams5 - 03/03/2009
- Really good but I'm not sure about the rhyming. It seems a bit off somehow.
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- Nisa the Brown Nose Clown - 02/26/2009
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A lovely poem/script.
Your word choices are great but when it comes to the rhyming, I think you need to mix up a bit. All in all, 5/5 - Report As Spam
- UC Poika - 02/26/2009
- couldn't even read it. maybe it needs music. try off rhyme or eye rhyme or don't rhyme. keep writing you'll learn
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- seaweed33 - 02/24/2009
- That is beautiful and so romantic. smile
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- 5_Demonic Angel_5 - 02/23/2009
- wow really nice xD 5!
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- Strawberry Sluurpee - 02/22/2009
- really good
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