Please notice me T_T

• Artist: D4rkFir3L0v3
• Description: A little poem about this one guy that I like.
• Date: 07/29/2008
• Tags: love notice

Im sitting right there
But you dont see me
Your talking to her
but you wont talk to me
She lays on your shoulder
And I start to cry
Its hard to belive
Its a 2hr drive
You laugh and talk
As I coutinue to cry
You flat out ignore me
everytime I try
When you get hurt
I help you out
When you get messy
I pig out
When your all alone
I sit next to you
And you still dont notice me
But I notice you
What must I do
For you to notice me
How must I play
For you to play with me
How must I dress
for you to look at me
the same way you look at her
everyone is always
kidding around
by saying
You guys should get married
or get a room
And wat must I Say
For you to include me
All I ask for
Is for you to notice me

Comments

[peacekitten65]

Nice poem. I think that everyone has felt that way about someone & it sux.

[Shigure Soma fan]

I feel what you are getting at. I myself have felt that way.

[L Gary Oldman]

The sentiment is good, rework it and pay attention to grammar and structure. I give it a 2

[funnyman332]

Good poem. Very romantic. I agree with S8ker, if you aren't being you, then you won't enjoy it if you ever do get him. You'll be someone who you aren't, and that's no fun.

[S8ker_for_live101]

its a good poem but if this is ture just be ur self dont be something ur not cuz then he notice u for wat u did ull hav to lie to be like him oflie of being something ur not


good luck