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biggrin Here we go.
Far beneath the cave of trolls,
Am I, the call me the stealer of souls. twisted
I travel in gray, black but not white,
for I am no creature of the light. ninja
There are servants here- small and insignificant,
for they regard me as magnificent. twisted
And in the shadow by my door,
is the Grim Reaper himself- my mentor. eek
We bring you here- him and I,
for only one purpose... to slowly die. gonk
Then when you feel that first terrible pain,
you know the wicked shall soon reign. sad
You feel the heat flare up inside you,
you can't breathe- there's nothing you can do. confused
As you strain for one last breath,
you face your enevitable death. eek
Above it all, Hell's Angels sing,
with the Grim Reaper and I, Evil shall forever ring... emo
The End???
Hope you liked!!!!! biggrin
- by mlover4evr |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/18/2008 |
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- Title: Pain's Prodigy
- Artist: mlover4evr
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Ok, please I would love some critics on this. And let me know if I copied something w/o meaning too!
Please, thank you, and enjoy. :) - Date: 07/18/2008
- Tags: pain
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Comments (3 Comments)
- xXxShatterxMexXx - 07/18/2008
- thats good. you should look at On Frail Wings Of Vanity's poems. theyy're reallly really good.
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- The-new-me321 - 07/18/2008
- its a little dark but i like it i write too but i dont have the gold to put any of my stuff up here and i dont think mine are any good but yours is cool i like it it has deep feeling and esence
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- On Frail Wings Of Vanity - 07/18/2008
- Hey, don't be hard on yourself. Thats a really good start! A few grammar/spelling errors, but the poem kicked a**. I love it.
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