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These stories ive had in my head for along time

Vampire_Panda14
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Posted: Sat Apr 11, 2009 @ 02:42am

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	Untitled pt6 Dawn was scared and alone. what was this feeling that she had? She was used to being alone but this time it was different. It felt as if her heart was hevay. Dawn remembered the first time she was alone. She promised not to let anyone get close to her. Now she wasnt sure. What was going on? What was happening to her?

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Deaths_Daughter4018
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Wed May 06, 2009 @ 07:36pm

Hey Jazz!

I think your story has great potential, but there are quistions dangling in this story and in the plot. What are these villages? Where are they? Is there controversy between them? Is Dawn human? Why was she out in the forest? What time period is it? Is it modern? Is it the old days or is it a totally new time line? What Village is she in? Why does Sasuke want to kill his brother? What history do they both have together?

These are quistions that I would very much like to know and possably others would like to know as well.

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