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Hikari-san13
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sApPy StOrY...
I wrote this RLLY short story when I was bored... I write a lot of stories but this 1 is one of my favs cuz it so sad T^T
I dunno if I did the grammar right but I tried^^ I summited this in arenas so VOTE!!
]http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=100062105



The fog was unbearable. And the rain was dropping out of the sky wet and cold. In a small village called Calm Water, two children was in a meadow outside the village. It was their secret place where they would play. There was no other children among the villagers. You see, it was a very small village far away from town or other villages.
"Are you sure we're aloud here when its so foggy and wet?" mumbled Lina.
"They won't know." smiled Nastumi.
"Hey? Can you make a promise?"
"Anything."
"Can we stay together forever?"
"Absolutely!"
And after that they both held hands. Soon Lina and Nastumi began to smell smoke. When Lina turned around, the village was on fire!! Fear for her parents she began running toward the village. When Nastumi and Lina arrived, blood was at their feet and vicious vampires were killing the villagers. Their fangs dripping of blood was so hard to look at. Nastumi scream as a vampire started feeding on his mother. The vampire looked at Nastumi and smiled. It wasn't a normal smile. It was filled with evil. The vampire rushed at Nastumi and beared his fangs. Lina couldn't stand it ,so she went in front of Nastumi and the vampire reached for her fragile neck and bit it. Lina screamed in pain. In a few minutes she was lying in a pool of blood. She could see Nastumi crying out to her.
"No!! No!! Lina!!" Nastumi cried.
"I-I'm sorry... I couldn't fulfill our promise..." Lina spoke in a whisper.
After she said those words Lina fell into the darkness still thinking about Nastumi.








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iNerdy Muffin
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comment Commented on: Sun Sep 21, 2008 @ 11:00pm
omg u make me cry! how do u do that heart?


comment Commented on: Sun Sep 21, 2008 @ 11:01pm
press alt and 3 @ da same time ^^ so u like it? =o



Hikari-san13
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cami90
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comment Commented on: Sun Sep 21, 2008 @ 11:05pm
ahaha that sad Lina was so brave crying crying


comment Commented on: Mon Sep 22, 2008 @ 04:21am
OMG Dx
what kind of sick story is this?
D<
EVERYBODY IS DIEING!! Dx



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M1dN1ght-Dragon96
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comment Commented on: Mon Sep 22, 2008 @ 09:01pm
omg!!!! i luved that story so much <3 it makes me so sad and happy and i feel loved!!!!!! this is now my fav story every T^T so sad!!!!!! ima save it FOREVER!!!!!


comment Commented on: Tue Sep 23, 2008 @ 12:55am
grrrrr how dare you make me sad XD...good story but i dont like the fact that everyone thinks vampires are evil



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Im_The_Dog_Your_The_Cat
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comment Commented on: Tue Sep 23, 2008 @ 02:15am
I really liked it! It was good.I pictured Lina and Nastumi like little kids. But in the end I realized they were older. Make it a little more spesific. I thought it was really sad in the end though...


comment Commented on: Tue Sep 23, 2008 @ 03:14am
that waz deep man <3 it!


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Lil Miss Neko-Chan
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comment Commented on: Tue Nov 11, 2008 @ 04:16am
crying its soo good but......it makes meh sad cuz ima vamp.......BUT ima good vamp 4laugh
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