Umbrella

• Artist: FleurDeLyssity
• Description:
• Date: 02/10/2014
• Tags: umbrella

Tears like a mirror
Reflect the sadness
I don't want to see
Your furrowed brows
Your narrowed eyes
The curve of your lips
I want to make them all
Disappear
Tears like the rain
I want to be the sunshine
To chase those clouds away
I want you to laugh
Like a brook over rocks
Like the wind through the trees
I want you to smile
Till your cheeks hurt
You don't know
How your face shines
You can't see
How your eyes sparkle
Golden rays like the sun
Form your heart
Reach to me
And make me feel warm and bright
I want to always see the light
Behind your glittering smile
So please don't be sad
Please smile and laugh and be happy
With all your heart

Comments

[FleurDeLyssity]

The brows and lips form an expression...I don't know what you mean by "on" the umbrella? This poem isn't talking about an umbrella. The title is a metaphor...

[Penultimate Penance]

You should separate them and make them into stanzas / paragraphs and add a few punctuation marks. Are the brows and lips a form of personification? What does it represent on the umbrella? You should be more specific.