we were friends

• Artist: NocturnalVirus
• Description: another crappy submission by me XD
• Date: 08/01/2012
• Tags: friendship lost pain hurt

what hurts the most,
We were friends,
we were brothers,
you blamed me for your mistakes,
I wish you could have seen past that fog you made
keeping yourself blind from the world,
we all changed except for one thing
we were friends,
we were brothers
when will you realize what you did was wrong
when will you stop blaming others for mistakes.
you were my friend
my brother
has these yeears meant nothing to you...

Comments

[LaffyTaffyTasty]

Not great but I have a suggestion. It seems you did some reflecting on a prior friendship. This poem also had a decent echoing effect. One of the styles that is well suited for this poem is a pallindrome try it and learn more about it on shadow poetry.