The Boy With the Golden Eyes

• Artist: SeaTerrors
• Description: I wrote this in 9th grade which was four years ago. It was used for the opening of a fiction story.
• Date: 03/14/2012
• Tags: with golden eyes

I’m sick of pretending

Can’t you see?

This world you are defending

Will never set you free

Further we are dragged down

The light out of sight

Further from the kings crown

Closer to the dark night

We’ll never make it

To the sky

We could have saved him

From the boy with the golden eyes

Comments

[Lorem Corpus]

The rhythm is a bit off, but other than that it's okay. But the theme's been used a million times over... and so have your words. I mean, if you were going to use an overused theme, it would still be good as long as you used original phrases, right? But you didn't. I give it a 3/5.