Hell would be Heaven to you

• Artist: Tokenza
• Description: This poem is simply anger. Speaking out. Feeling.
• Date: 01/20/2011
• Tags: hell would heaven dave eternity

You scorned me
Hurt and betrayed
All I gave was love
Kindness and faith
Misery is my friend
Hate is my tool
Life I shall take
From you, you misbegotten fool
I throw you to the wind
Hoping you land in mud
A slow painful death
Is a blessing I cannot provide
That which I give
Makes hell a short ride
So come now dear traveler
See the one who hurt me
Watch as they glow with fire
And as skin melts away
The burning flesh so comforting
My mind sets at ease
For I now will consume
Devour and gormandize
Alas your soul I cannot touch
Until hells reprise
Then I shall come for you
Eternity's a long ride

Comments

[Tokenza]

Just reading said commentary, finally got round to it!! Mon emperor, the idea behind the emotion is one of confusion, destruction and loathing. The style i chose to do this piece in was meant to have no flow or pattern. Each verse is meant to stir through your thoughts separately and finally grasp into you conscious being. I do acknowledge your criticism and hope that some of my other works shall be more to your liking.

[3mperor_Ner0]

I didn't like this, it is choppy and ruins the flow and the feel of the piece.

[lhou19]

bravo!!!! great job!!!!!