this confusion feels like....

• Artist: xX_Kozakura_Xx
• Description: whole title: this confusion feels like a panic attack
  
  I wrote this...I don't really remember, it had something to do with me liking a girl but not being able to ask her out for one reason or another, I don't recall honeslty.
• Date: 07/26/2010
• Tags: confusion feels like

I feel the connection
I need to hide it
I can’t take comfort in its grasp
The warmth of it
Fire
I would burn
Haha
A menacing laugh
My mind filters
Words on my tongue
Like ants they march
4 words
not 3
no
I have to make it personal
I open my mouth to speak
I shut it
It’s better for us both
My head falls to the desk
I sigh a deep breath
No. no. no!
A frustrated noise
Confusion

Comments

[LikesCake]

Really good! The structure really does a good job of not only presenting the story, but also the jumbled thoughts that you would feel in that situation. Imagery was nice, the lines really connected to me personally. Once again, excellent work!

[xX_Kozakura_Xx]

thank you for the kind words, and comments that actually let me know what I do well or need to improve on, I'm glad you enjoy my work so much ^_^

[Yureiaa Hearts]

I love how you use structure to your advantage so well. This is your second work that I've enjoyed in the last hour. You're one of the few artists in this arena that knows what they're doing. :S Others just post crap like a hit and run.

[xX_Kozakura_Xx]

I agree, normally I dislike my own work, but this one has a certain attraction to it. thank you

[xXprincessdeshadowsXx]

i like it though i dont know y