The Imprisoned Demi

• Artist: Pro Amy Shiko1991
• Description: You'r probubly going to find that most of my poems come from my dreams XDDD
  This is all about a girl with very very special and uniqe talents but her family wont give her the fredome that she longs to have.
• Date: 06/15/2010
• Tags: imprisoned demi intrapment

She started off human,
Felt out of place.
She found out she was hollow.
Was that the case?

She loves her family.
They mean well.
She used to go places,
Even after she fell.

Now she's stuck home.
She calls she's going.
They say no and make an excuse.
But theres something they don't know.

She's now a Demi.
Still she's traped.
Being helled back.
They will never slap.

She tryed to get answers,
But they refuze to say.
She wants to run,
But she chosses to stay.

She chosses to stay,
Even threw death.
Because she loves them.
even though it feels like meth.

She know's her place,
But they wont let her try.
She fight's to be strong,
But insted she'll cry.

She's a fighter.
Just like her dad.
She's just as caring,
And she hides when she's sad.

Her time is here,
But she doesn't have a chance.
She's the imprizoned Demi,
She will never dance.

Comments

[Beats Audio]

I think you should probably reread your poetry and correct the gramatical mistakes.

I also noticed that;

1) It doesn't flow together. It's everywhere really, short and long. It makes it difficult to express emotions through words if you don't make it flow.

2) I noticed that most of your 'rhymes' had absolutely no relation to this piece. It seems like you only said it so it WOULD rhyme. Which is wrong. That's not how poetry should be wrote.

[johncena8511]

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