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They call out to death, Though he hardly listens;
Their hopes are listed upon their breath, Their wills clearly written!
They gather at the square, they hearken the words of He;
The man who rides upon the mare, Takes a gander at me;
An island in the distance, Gives false desires;
It all ends in an instant, In the light of the fire.
- by Avi_Veneficus |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/23/2010 |
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- Title: Uncertain Revolt
- Artist: Avi_Veneficus
- Description: The symbolism is all up to the reader... There is to be no future synchronicity amongst those that read this
- Date: 05/23/2010
- Tags: uncertain revolt
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Melany Kate - 07/08/2010
- i realy, REALY like it, but it's missing somthing little but key....
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- Avi_Veneficus - 06/05/2010
- Alice Loves Him~ Thank you for the comment. Actually I was working in a masculine rime couée rhyme that mixes both the couplet style with the Clerihew...
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- bram toker - 06/05/2010
- Good language, but poor rhythm.
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- oOo_shygirl_oOo - 05/24/2010
- wow....this is...wow
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