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If I'd had one more moment,
one more moment of your time,
time you gave to him not me.
If I'd had one more moment,
one more moment to tell you
all that you ever meant to me.
If we'd had one more moment,
one more moment alone together,
to talk everything out together.
If I'd had but one more moment,
I would've cut out my heart,
rapped it up, and gave it to you.
If I'd known what you wanted,
a full commitment, all my time,
I would've given it all, every bit.
If I'd known you'd be leaving,
I would've run away from my life,
just to follow you to the end.
If I'd seen the future,
my empty, lonely future,
I would've ended it there.
If I'd stopped to think of you,
more than I already did,
would it have changed anything?
If you'd stopped to think of me,
about my on-going struggle,
for a career, an education.
If you'd seen the future,
your beautiful, plentiful future,
would you have bothered with me?
If you'd known I wouldn't follow,
would you have left sooner,
and neglect to shun me away?
If you'd known what I needed,
a structure to build off of,
to build us, not me, a future.
If you'd had one more moment,
would you have accepted me,
and kept me as your own?
If we'd had one more moment,
would you have sat and listened,
and accepted my needs and plees?
If you'd had one more moment,
would you have told me just how
meaningless you found my love?
If you'd had one more moment,
one more moment of my time,
would it truely have mattered?
- by Ryoki Rayn |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/18/2010 |
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- Title: One more moment...
- Artist: Ryoki Rayn
- Description: Dedicated to the woman who ripped my heart out. Rest In Piece, Juliet.
- Date: 04/18/2010
- Tags: more moment
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Comments (1 Comments)
- Echo Ligeia - 04/18/2010
- Very good work: honest and wrenching. The parallel structure is a good technique. I felt that your poem got better as it went along (probably because you got more into it), which is perhaps detrimental for submersion. Maybe you should change the order of your stanzas around a bit so that your best paragraphs are more spread around?
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