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She'll write you a love letter darling,
like one you've never read before.
She'll write you a love letter,
with her blood that's drained out on the floor.
She'll write you a love letter darling,
one of love mixed with hate.
She'll write you a love letter,
because she hoped she'd be more than just a date.
She'll write you a love letter darling,
because she was sure she was your only.
She'll write you a love letter,
because you left her so lonely.
She'll write you a love letter darling,
like one you've never read before.
She'll write you a love letter,
with her blood that's drained out on the floor.
4/18/10
- by EmoKisses-x |
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- | Submitted on 04/17/2010 |
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- Artist: EmoKisses-x
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The title is
She'll Write You A Love Letter Darling
I couldnt fit it in the space provided for the Title.
I was just randomly thinking of the phrase
"She'll write you a love letter darling"
and I made up the rest.
I actually like this one..not to boast or anything. :]
I like my repitition & rhyming pattern.
But I wanna know your thoughts,
so comment & rate PLEASE(:
<3 - Date: 04/17/2010
- Tags: love hate blood suicide loveletter
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Comments (4 Comments)
- EmoKisses-x - 05/01/2010
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Thanks again ! (:
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- Echo Ligeia - 05/01/2010
- I like the repetition and rhyming pattern too. ^.^ It really is good because it keeps bringing up this visceral image of a letter made in blood; it highlights the irony. This poem could possibly be improved by making the syllables match up too, in some kind of pattern, but I recognize the difficulty in doing that without losing your ideas. All in all I will give it a 3/3, which is what I give to a good, solid poem. smile
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- EmoKisses-x - 04/23/2010
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Please comment..
I haven't gotten a comment in a while,
and I want opinions on this one.
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