I love my love

• Artist: critic-the-homeless
• Description: y first valentines poem!!!
• Date: 02/04/2010
• Tags: love love

The sparrow met dove,
The beaver met burrow,
Together they sang,
And forever they sang

I love and I love
My love loves me.

The sparrow assked one question,
Unfortold he said,
What is the meaning of time well spent.

The Beaver dug into the burrow and thought
what is the meaning of time well spent,
I have but one question, that has yet to be lent.

Even though it was off track,
they both sang

I love my love
and my love loves me

Comments

[Amaria-chan]

This is very good. I am happy that you didn't rhyme! People son't understand poems don't have to rhyme, and sound just as good, or better! Great job 5/5. Please look at mine? Thanks

[WelcomeToAnotherDayInHell]

watch ur spelling. but i like this, don't get off track! smile 4/5

[Amvu]

Interesting deceptive writing and I like how you make your words flow. But I was interested in what the beaver would've said to the question from the sparrow but you left me hanging, so I gave you a 3/5. Next time try completing and idea. In poetry, it's not a good idea to leave the audience hanging.