The Good Guy

• Artist: thomulus
• Description: This is for all those good guys out there, that are waiting. Sort of like me
• Date: 01/29/2010
• Tags: good guys sweet love flowers

We've known each other, since sixth grade
I was their the whole time, their in the shade
as you lived your life, and met those guys
with their fancy clothes, and wacked out ties

I've known the whole time, we'd be perfect together
We'd be happy all day, no matter what the weather
but you've never thought, of loving me,
come on girl, why can't you see?

Some of those guys, don't treat you right
if you loved me, I'd be your shining knight
So come on girl why can't you see?
why don't you think of loving me?

I'm the good guy, I'm not like them
that's why I'm writing, this poem
I'd open doors, and buy you flowers
because seeing your face, is like spring showers

You know girl, I'm the right one,
we could have, so much fun,
with fancy dinners, roses, things
and eventually diamond rings

Comments

[thomulus]

po-em, ok thanks, that does make sense, that's how I was saying it out loud and forgot about the dash

[just anni]

This is very good. There were a few spelling errors, but nothing major. I thought it was very sweet. In the fourth stanza, second line, you might want to write poem with a dash between the o and e. That way, it will rhyme more smoothly.

[invisibleninja159]

awesome i would want him to feel for me lyke dis...

[Purple_Pearl_Girl]

I like it. Its very beautiful.

[Angel Animez]

itz absolutely beautiful

[thomulus]

thanks Brota, come on guys comments and critiques!

[x Minato Kamikaze x]

0.0' .......................wow...........that was amazing! thats exactly how i feel about one of my friends! 10 out of 5!