Yes, I've met death. Have you?

• Artist: Acelin Rae
• Description: Shorter poem I wrote off the top of my head.
• Date: 12/12/2009
• Tags: death have

My resolves thought to be unbreakable, my intentions unfound.
My heart is racing;Around and around.
Like a clock without batteries time stops again
Like a sinner without mercy; it's time to repent.
But leave me now for I must leave
But leave me with the dreams I wished to be
So that I may find my true purpose
So that I can I fly
Return to the afterlife
Goodbye, Goodbye.

Comments

[tea loaf]

Not bad, not bad. There's room for improvement, but keep trying. I suggest writing drafts of your poetry first, in case you would like to edit or add some "pizzaz". Not bad though. 3/5