HeartBreaker

• Artist: StoryDreamer17
• Description: Well a poem about a very disturbed young girl that hates men and sees them as toys.
  oh and if you like my poetry me site is http://storydreamer17.deviantart.com/.
• Date: 07/28/2009
• Tags: heartbreaker evil dark insane crazy

Look into my eyes
I shall enchant you
Gaze upon my face
You can never look away
Take my sweet words into your heart
For soon it will become mine
Once you have fallen into my spell
Your nightmare begins
You fool!
You have fallen for me!
You are so blind!
There is no turning back!
It has all begun!
Your heart already belongs to me!
Now I am able to do as I please
Rip it apart!
Shred it into pieces!
Squeeze it into my own hands!
Burn it!
Cut it!
The possiblities are endless!
Poor thing
Does it hurt?
Fool I laugh at your pain!
Man kind is my toy!
Your kind is the cause of my pain!
On all of your kind I shall
take my revenge!

J.C.Roll

Comments

[darkgamer2]

Not bad it would sound better if you revised some of your lines like from line 3 on your peom has alot of line that could be soo much more powerful if you had shortened the lines themselfs, like instead of you can never look away, you should have combined it with the line above and made it flow but overall one of the best I have read on gaia 5 stars