If she was an object......

• Artist: kaykay1213
• Description: a poem about how some guys treat girls
• Date: 07/19/2009
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If ihts that important than fix iiht. heart
I dont understand y i have to be the blame.
Make uhp ur mind or leave iiht alone.
iiht cant be that hard to understand. but y understand iiht, iiht wasnt created just for u. sweatdrop
but then y even try iiht iif u didnt kno wat to do? i can tell theres a problem an that u dont kno how to solve iiht.
but if u jus askd i probly culd have shown u.
Now heres wats tricky, heres the best part.
if u watched wat u were doin, u wuld truly understand...not jus the meanin but how to comprehend.
but if theres no instructions tell meh wat suld u do?
clearly not tear uhp the peices and break them apart.
if u were listening u'd kno iihts inside ur heart....
listen and follow iiht wont fall apart!!

-KayKay1213
a KayKay1213 Original

Comments

[Vivinica]

Try leaving the emotes out, and proof reading. Chat speak is okay for jotting down ideas for a poem, but final copies you will be placing in certain places should be changed to proper spelling, unless for poetic reasons. Also, it doesn't seem like much of a poem as a story. perhaps re-wording some things to make it more poetic would be helpful for example (if you dont mind)
"Those who listen
Know what lies in their hearts
Listen carefully
So it wont fall apart"

[Mev2013]

it was cute i liked it smile 5/5

[Freaky Babiii]

i like it good job

[myinnerjuiceperson1]

I love the ideas in this, and I love how you made it rhyme as well. It definitely works. 5/5!
(Tho I have to ask...why did you keep writing "iiht" for "it"?)