Love and Sorrow

• Artist: Pixie Sora Cullen
• Description: just a poem i wrote.
• Date: 07/19/2009
• Tags: love sorrow

You told me that you’d never leave me
That you always wished for you to please me
You told me that you would always be there
You lied to me you didn’t care
And now I’m standing all alone
No one’s there I can’t go home

There emptiness inside my heart
There’s no hope left
I need a new start
You said that I would find my star
I searched endlessly but it seems to far
My heart is lost in endless darkness
My tears no longer fall
I’m through believing in fantasies and holding on to dreams
I wish for this emptiness to be filled

You left this world with out a word
You left my soul in endless sorrow
You told me to find someone to love
And soar through the sky just like a dove

One day I’ll spread my wings and fly away
But you have to wait and see

Comments

[Hadenshall]

I feel just a piece in the middle became a little weaker than the rest, but overall I liked this. You are good with your rhymes and the syllable patterns are keenly put. Nice job and keep up the writing!

Your fellow writer,
~Hadenshall

[silly_clown_103]

i like it just a little choppy i think