Six Feet Too Late

• Artist: Zombie Kebab
• Description: A poem about a friend
• Date: 07/08/2009
• Tags: feet late

Why are you crying
Why are you dying
My friend your pain I feel it too
You sigh and are blind
You see what you believe
Which is nobody could love you
And now you slice your wrist
Through tendons and veins
You bleed and you laugh
As you cry deep inside
You look at your life
You cry out why
You lay there in blood
As I walk in to find
You bleeding to death
I rush to the phone
I call that well known number
And pray that they save your life
But oh, Its too late
You met such a terrible fate
My friend I loved you
But now you're gone
Laying six feet under me
The stone epitaph all thats left
"Here lies dear child and friend
Who met a untimely end"
But if only they knew
The truth about you
If only they knew
We couldve saved you.

Comments

[Hallow16]

This is good. Sad, but good. Again, punctuation is needed. You need commas in several places. Ex. 'My friend, your pain, I feel it too.' and you need an apostriphe on the last line. Could've, not couldve. Other than that, a good poem ^.^

Thank you,
Hallow16