Blue Bird

• Artist: Zero FxOxP
• Description: This one I thought up while sitting in my room one day. I like feeling the wind so I opened my window. A little blue bird landed on the window sill. It did it several times before it actually came into my room. I was surprised because I thought birds were skittish. The visits continued for a long time. I didn't see it for the longest time until a couple days ago. This is a little tribute to my friend.
• Date: 06/10/2009
• Tags: blue bird

Blue Bird:

Blue Bird
Why do you cry?
As you fly high
In the sky?

Did you lose someone?
Someone special?
Don’t cry Blue Bird
No one has died
So why do you still cry?

Is it because of love?
Did you give it to them?
Did they return it unopened?
Do not cry Blue Bird
Do not cry

Instead you must fly
Fly into the sky
Into the blue, blue sky
Fly little Blue Bird
To that blue, blue sky

Comments

[Zero FxOxP]

That's why most of my poetry is free verse

[E d i b l e F l o w e r]

There are some good elements here [re: potential], but the amount of ryhming... eh, it makes it seem very amatuerish. Like, three to four ryhmes in a single line ^ ^' it's almost painful to read. Try focusing more on just writing, and not rhyming.