I hate you

• Artist: Dravaga
• Description: This is one of my first attempts at a poems, so it's not that good. Criticisms welcome! Please tell me what I can improve.
• Date: 06/07/2009
• Tags: hate love

I hate you.
Your eyes,
Your hair,
Your smile.
I hate you.
I always have.

But is this really hate?
If I hate him so,
Why do i get this feeling?
Why do I feel so happy,
And yet so sad?

Why am I sorry?
I hate you.
Why do I regret those words?
I hate you.
Why do I feel so guilty
For admitting
I will hate you forever.

I hate you,
Get out of my life.
I don't want to see,
I don't want to think,
About you.
I hate you,
Stay away from me.
I don't want you here.
Make those dreams go away.

I hate you.
I hate you.
I hate you.
I hate you.
I hate you.
I love you.

Comments

[ChoclateFactory]

I think when sb says "I hate u" It means "I dont wanna hate you.Dont make me hate."
Good poem.

[x-PixieChick]

It's very good for your first try....something that could help you out would be to use words that make the reader really think....like the I hate you bit...you could have changed the hate to a different word to make the reader really understand what your feeling...great job ^_^

[greenmint_17]

I think alot of people go trough this alest once in their live.For the first time this isn't bad alot of emotion and your readers understand.But don't use hate so much on the last line... the avi behind me is right!

[GoaMagara]

I have had those feelings before. For the small bit of criticisim I have. On the last verse don't use "I hate you" more than once. Use other words that display the same meaning or feeling such as I dispise you. For your first time this is great. I hope to see more.

[RomeoVillaLobos]

Awesome. I felt the emotions bleed out.

[SiaDaBomb]

for your first attempt at a poem it it absolutly splendid! i love it b/c i have felt those feeling before..and in the end they were the same as the ending. I LOVE HIM! anywho Great job!

[Xxhells bloodxX]

i think its gewd and makes my poems look like s**t >_>