this is a first for me

• Artist: X-xRamza-Tempusx-X
• Description: mildly depressing but thoose of us who fight ourselves within can relate
• Date: 04/27/2009
• Tags: first

its not every day you can look to the sky
and say you finnally see the beauty
you see for someone like me
battling this demon
has let such joys and wonders astray
im a lone town boy
slightly misunderstood
but no longer on the edge
my demons, thoose sins
are nothing to be laughed at
ive learned alot in my time of need
im a fighter, a survivor
this isnt something that i plan for you to understand
that little boy is dead
i have no memories, of a past
wether it be to painful
or not worth the remebering
i look at the thoose pictures
the image of a boy
when life was nothing but good
he later threw his life away
the only witness to this crime was the blood stained
earth and not even a whisper of good bye
My battle is within no screams of help can be heard
nothing but silence and bloodstained earth

Comments

[amantewords]

As a cliche poem this was and the point being made It left me like "okay"-What I'm saying is it left me feeling as if it was unfinished. Yes, yes we all get the battled demons, and hardships, and 'you're not the same' anymore but I'd like to hear more of different side to it considering 'no one would understand'. Don't get me wrong I favored how this overall played out because the structure, I loved it really. Next make it more clear what you're trying to say.