The Lovers

• Artist: Aren Coix
• Description: I forgot what movie I saw in class but it was one of the joy-turned-to-ash kind of movies. Wrote two versions of this but my friends like this version better for some reason.
  A very big thank you to omen naoki as well
• Date: 04/07/2009
• Tags: lovers

Once upon a time in a far off land
A couple ran hand in hand

Love ran so deep and new
Together not a thing they couldn't do

All dreams must end and theirs did too
Wasn't it always too good to be true?

She tripped, she fell, she bled, she died
He looked, he cringed, he froze, he cried

Hurt and broken, grief took another course
He unburied her three month corpse

He went home and put her in bed
He cremated her there and then

He scattered the ashes with silent screams
And became the doom haunting new lovers' dreams

Comments

[Omen Naoki]

The flow is really nice, but the 5 line doesn't go well with the story, if i may, id suggest changing it to "All dreams must end and theirs did too."
its just a suggest