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I hear the wind blow
It feels like it'll snow
In my sight
it was night
I dream and slept
what should of kept
the heart of you
What to do
In this hour
better than a falling tower.
I woke up
and I did a gulp
I hear something up!
I grabbed a bat
and I saw a rat
Then I heard noise
Oh boy!
I started to shake
Hearing the noise make
such a noise
I had thoguht it was a boy
I walked in the door
Better than a moor
and in my sight
the night shined
on my mother!
oh brother!
"What are you doing you are making such a noise!"
"Sorry sweety I was hungry and well Oh boy!"
We went back to bed but the wind really blew
I wonder if it grewed.
So I went to bed
Didn't watch fred
I slept or sleep
better to kept then keep
So I wonder alsleep
in my sight
the night
was gone
it was done!

- Title: The night
- Artist: Sakura Hi
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Description:
I wrote this right now,but it's light outside.
XD anyway I really hope to get
5 stars......
- Date: 03/24/2009
- Tags: night
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Sakura Hi - 04/19/2009
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I'm not trying to make it rhym I wanted some of it to rhym
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- l_Shamrock_l - 03/26/2009
- Sorry to say, but this doesn't make any sense. It's poorly worded and a lot of what's supposed to rhyme(I'm going to assume) doesn't. You should put a little more thought into how you're going to use your poetic devices and the word choice. Especially if you're trying to rhyme.
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