Sitting by the window

• Artist: angel41791
• Description: *Update* I fixed the typos. I noticed without the proper comas, the beat of the poem is lost. If anyone sees anymore tell me.
  
  And when a human with no luck begins to hope, god crushes their soul with passionate words.
• Date: 03/21/2009
• Tags: sitting window

Sitting by the window,
in my favorite jeans,
a favorite little t-shirt,
waiting for a dream.

Sitting on the staircase,
waiting for some hope,
knowing that I love you,
and I'll have to cope.

Sitting on the floorboards.
Sitting in your room.
Knowing that you love her,
and letting go so soon.

Sitting on you desk chair,
asking you with words:
"Will you ever love me?
Give what I deserve?"

Sitting by the window.
Looking at my life.
Knowing that you love her,
and living in my strife.

Comments

[crimson-storm-95]

just so good it a 10 but i can only give you 5

[Shadowashes]

I like it. A lot of people proably feel like this. A few typos though. I still say 5.

[GAlA Site Assistant 60]

nice i understand how this poem feels lonely waiting for love.. anyway 5 stars ^_^

[gothicbabybear109-Rp]

it's good, except the typo's, i give it a 4

[NakedJack]

The description is better than the poem. What is the deal?

[lildawni]

Definitely one of the better poems I've randomed through today. Again, slightly forced feel to the rhyme scheme, but decent nonetheless. smile