I am luv him

• Artist: cosmic_grl_102
• Description: how i feel about meh and meh boifriend, comment wut eva joo want about it, but i just made it up, i have a knack for doing that, and if joo don't lyk tht and think it ishn't REAL poetry, then tell meh! i don't rlly care tho! plz comment and rate!
  P.S.
  Srry it sux so uber bad! it ish muy cheesy and i tink tht i could have done better, i just don't feel lyk goin bak to edit crap! so yea!
• Date: 03/20/2009
• Tags: love

I hav not rlly felt this way befor,
and i guess it ish different for a reason.
He makes meh happy alot more,
i ish not used to this type of season.

I'm not used to this feeling,
always getting butterflies in meh tummy.
Does he even know it ish meh heart he's stealing?
This is such a funny feeling!

I guess it ish luv,
when ever i think about meh amour.
he ish meh angel from above,
he ish teh one i adore!!!! heart

When ever i am too far away,
i miss him too much.
This ish a feeling i cannot say,
he ish meh crutch.

He calls meh his cute angel,
and i call him meh hot savior,
when i see him i get as stiff as old gel,
everday i love him more and more.

he ish teh hot lion,
i ish teh cute kitten,
this best not be a con,
he make my heaart warm as a wool mitten!



*sigh i luv him* heart

heart heart heart heart

Comments

[Radiotron5000]

Lol. It's a very cute piece despite what it's said smile not exactly "Poetry" but it has the essence within it if ignoring the grammatical issues in it. The way you express your love to him is a bit part of the tone of this poem. And it gets a 4/5 from me cool

[X25 To LifeX]

My only adive is to lose the "ish" and "mehs" as they are inappropriate for a piece of literature such as poetry. And the only other thing I'm picky about is that you say he's your "hot savior" I would lose "hot" because when you describe him as your savior you shouldn't add something superficial like "hot" in a love poem.

[xXx Moody xXx]

I agree with summer

[summer1412]

Agreed, Raven. It's...I want to shoot myself after I get through it so I never have to deal with it again.

It's alright, love fodder as most poetry tends to be, but pretty good nonetheless. It'd be a whole lot better if it wasn't written out like a valley girl on crack, but hey, what can ya do...

[Slayt Raven]

well....i have one thing i must say. the ish's and meh's are annoying when youre reading something thats not a fast text or something. if its written in a poem or somethiing it makes it really difficult to keep going instead of skipping to the next piece. other than that its good