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I stand, then drop, down on one knee,
I close my eyes, and yet I see.
It matters not, if it is real.
What matters is not what I feel.
The venting is. The way I rant.
The way I hurt all those I can't,
I can't just leave, it'd be too much.
And yet I cause much pain as such.
What is this thought? Feeling, rather.
I think and ask, does it matter?
My hands are clenched, my eyes aflame,
In sparks I leave, yet still I came.
The target found, I run right on,
I run and run, god knows how long,
I find him, yes, that much I do.
My fury flows, no thoughts of you.
For you would stop, my rage at least.
But I run on, let chaos feast.
I burn, I rage, I want to die,
I want to kill, I want to cry.
And what the ******** is this all for?
I've never seen such crap before...
Since when do I just spazz and fight?
Since when do I 'gain hide the light?
I do not know, I just rage on.
I do not care if this is wrong.
My patience snapped, my world had died.
Yet I don't think, yet I don't hide,
from what which killed my peace and mind,
all that which made me strong, yet kind.
I want to scream, I want to shout,
I want to weep, I want to pout,
I want to hurt, just like before,
Just grab and throw them to the floor.
And laugh and laugh, that much I could...
But what's gone wrong? In flames is wood...
It burns, it lights, yet falls apart...
That's it. No more. I shall depart...
- by SubtleMonster |
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- | Submitted on 03/18/2009 |
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- Title: Feely (?)
- Artist: SubtleMonster
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Yay for emo, I guess. Please comment, both positive and negative.
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Comments (4 Comments)
- MelTur - 07/03/2009
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I have to say that this just blew my mind to pieces. It is probably my favorite poem that I have read in this arena, and I have read alot of them. I could actually visualize the fire and anger that you wrote of when I was reading. It's excellent, and i hope you keep writing more.
5/5 - Report As Spam
- SubtleMonster - 03/21/2009
- heart
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- rocko11091 - 03/21/2009
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potentially one of the best poems i've seen in the arena so far...the imagery is amazing, it flows beautifully, figurative language is used well...style is good...the concept of this poem is very eloquently explained, so to speak...
Concept:5/5
Style: 5/5
Flow:5/5
Fig. Lang./Imagery:5/5
Overall: 5/5 ...first overall 5/5...congrats!!! biggrin - Report As Spam
- Kandii Gurll - 03/20/2009
- This is ... So beautiful
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