Dreaming

• Artist: missmapleleaf
• Description: A villanelle
• Date: 03/17/2009
• Tags: dreaming

It seems that when I dream, I dream of you.
When I'm asleep its like I'm not quite here.
I wonder what these dreams will bring me to.

In a world where I often have no clue,
At night I can let go of all my fear.
It seems that when I dream, I dream of you.

Its rough sometimes to always have this view,
Of you so far away and never near.
I wonder what these dreams will bring me to.

An hour sleeping always pulls me through.
When I'm drifting, the images are clear.
It seems that when I dream, I dream of you.

The dreams are like a purple kangaroo,
Not real, but in my mind they perservere.
I wonder what these dreams will bring me to.

And you, do you have these dreams like I do?
Is night a time of peace, and are you here?
It seems that when I dream, I dream of you.
I wonder what these dreams will bring me to.

Comments

[cooll666725]

Very good job on this poem as well. However, I recommend using less phrases like "The dreams are like a purple kangaroo," because these phrases make you poem seem desperate to rhyme. To be honest, it's better not to have a rhythm if it requires you to make the poem too far fetched. In general though it's a very nice poem. I'll give you another 4/5 rating.

[UC Poika]

Puzzled out real nice. Thank you.