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Run, be scared for all you’ve done
Because now it’s our time to have some fun.
The screams continue to echo the night.
Yell in fear, and die of fright.
Your deeds painted in red for all to see.
Life’s past wrongs will beckon thee.
Views of thine moral so badly portrayed.
So run be scared be very afraid.
- by Save-My-Day |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/16/2009 |
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- Title: Run be Very Afraid
- Artist: Save-My-Day
- Description: Scary stuff.Comment and cri-crit, not even going to say it.
- Date: 03/16/2009
- Tags: very afraid scary
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Comments (4 Comments)
- rocko11091 - 03/20/2009
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very nicely done! I see nothing you could improve on save trying to include some other types of figurative language...ex. metaphors, similies,whatever....dont hesitate to ask.... just cite your poem in the message if you want to respond...just so i know...
Concept: 5/5
Flow: 5/5
Style: 5/5
Figurative language/imagery: 3/5
Overall: 4.5/5 (5/5) - Report As Spam
- xhollywoodsDEAD - 03/19/2009
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Human fear can be so beautiful.
Well done, sir! - Report As Spam
- Bellatrix Scarlet - 03/16/2009
- Oh this is so clever! I love the rhythm and rhyme!
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