~PhoneCall

• Artist: FuriazFTW
• Description: I've been playing guitar for two years. This piece is my first composition, dated Oct. 3, 2008...
• Date: 03/15/2009
• Tags: phone call syxxwolf poetry guitar

"Somehow I never knew
what it meant to be afraid
consumed by arrogance
my only lifeline slowly frayed

The light once by my side
I'm shocked that I'm still sane
'Cause when I close my eyes
I realize I can't devise my

Fate! It's all a lie and
May! be I'm just fine
I can't just fall and lay here in sorrow...

('Cause I) Will! Go on, and though you're gone, I'll
Still! Resist the darkened dawn (and I)
Know! That you will be here tomorrow.

Comments

[Jerryboam]

Not my style

[Faded Dreams5]

Not too shabby. I could see a pretty decent song coming out of this. It would be interesting to hear it. I really like the lyrics, at any rate.
And thanks for the rating--coming from someone who considers themselves a pretty harsh critic (like you) that means a lot. smile

[Scarlett Succubus]

Deccent. I can see it as a song definetly though it would bee a short one considering the material. Then again some artist can make a buck repeating the same lyrics over and over.

[FuriazFTW]

Actually, I do give fives. However, I give them based on a general system that I have. If I consider it an average poem/avatar, I'll rate it a three. However, if it really sticks out, I'll give it a five.

So far, I've probably given out more threes and fours than anything else. I admit, I have been very critical of some entries, but... well, I rated them as I saw them. Don't rate me poorly because of how I judge other entries, rate me based on the quality of what I submit. :/

[UC Poika]

Maybe you should record it. Some lyrics stand alone. This ain't all that special to me. Probably because you say you're a critic. Maybe if you gave fives you'd get some back. 2