Frozen

• Artist: Keslinne
• Description: ok so as you can tell i'm not the best poet in the world, but this poem has special meaning, this is how i feel, this is my life's poem, so yah, all kinds of comments are welcome, even mean and/or cruel, i dont care, because it will help me become a better poet.
• Date: 02/08/2009
• Tags: frozen

I wait here in silence
as everyone passes by
no one looks at me
because no one cares as i wait here, and lie
i feel frozen, frozen beyond compare
because i know, that i will never feel the warmth
that so many have before me,
my hope is lost, my love is gone
what did i ever do to deserve something so wrong?
as i look up at the sun, hoping to feel some of its light
it disappears and dissolves into a black night
like my soul
and its never ending role
in the tide of fate
in the wind of sadness,
i hope someday to see my savior, an angel
to rescue me, from this dark time of madness,
and despair,
to take me away, to pick me up
on swift wings, before it too late,
before i stay frozen, frozen for eternity.

Comments

[FairyFumiko]

The more you try and rewrite, the better you will be. Keep up the good work.

[Spokane Native 2609]

Well I would like to point out that your length in this poem could be better but it was a good poem. 4/5

[WubbiE-L-]

pshhhh.. this sucks balls