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• Artist: Vundaluss
• Description: Just something I threw together in 10 min. It has an ABAB pattern, which is the pattern I usually write. I've already published three poems, and I'm hoping for a fourth...
• Date: 02/04/2009
• Tags: empty

To light with the darkness,
It's only for the best,
I can't stand the nothingness,
I might as well head West.

It sucked me in before,
It won't do that again,
I want nothing more,
because I really did sin.

The wind blows right through me,
I'm only a ghost,
I just want to be,
To live I want most.

Comments

[Vundaluss]

Thanks for the advice. It's always hard to try to figure out what other people think when your writing a poem. smile

[mr_wimp]

That's a good start but it's kind of ameteurish. You have potential i can see and i like your patterns but just devote alittle more time to your writing