Broken

• Artist: Kupop_Loves_Mary
• Description:
• Date: 01/30/2009
• Tags: broken

Unsure of what to say
As I watch our edges fray
Spiraling out of control
And it always seems to take a toll
When I wonder what went wrong
Not knowing why things changed
I always went along
Hoping things would get better
But my pillow just gets wetter
From the tears I cry at night
Knowing our future isn't bright
And that the days are getting darker
I know it in my heart
That as the summer ends
And the winter starts
That our friendship will get colder
And that as we get older
Our lives will seperate so easily
Making it clearer that our fates were sealed
The night that we revealed
Our true selves in the open
Not knowing we'd end up broken.

Comments

[Alibis of the Heart]

I liked it, but I have to agree with the others, in the middle it fell apart a bit.

[ll Tears of Joy ll]

i agree with the last comment
and i dont really get what the poem is about

[Amarante7]

I liked your beginning and your end but it sort of started falling apart in the middle. The words are nice and have a meaning behind them, they don't just rhyme, but once you start writing a poem in a certain style/format you should keep it consistent through-out the rest of the poem.