This Last Rose

• Artist: daverave1
• Description: Its just a poem I made at the top of my head :P so yeah read, comment, you know the rest
• Date: 01/28/2009
• Tags: last rose

You were everything to me,

You were my light, my soul,

But then I found out that you hated me,

That I was just a lonely guy that will never have you,

So now I understand,

This whole entire time you were using me,

For your own amusement,

You used me as a puppet to protect you,

To consume you,

Even after what I said to you,

That I will protect you,

That I will always care for you,

That I will always be by your side,

Well that's all behind me now,

I treated you with respect,

And all you did was break my heart,

Everytime we fight it hurts me,

After the fight I ask you to be my friend again,

And you always say yes,

So if you want me to be your friend,

This time I'll disappear,

And I will disappear like a falling petal on a rose,

Just like the rose I gave to you,

So if you want me back,

Your too late for that,

I now walk through the darkness,

And I will walk through it alone,

Even if it kills me,

Comments

[YellowYoYo]

o btw i forgot rating
3/5
=P try bettah next time

[YellowYoYo]

1. "your too late for that" cliche
2. even if it kills me? what the ********? where did that come from?
3. i think poetry shouldn't be redundant with words. you say that at least three times. i understand u try to emphasize meaning but it doesn't feel to me.
4. whats with this love poem trend? o.o everyone has one.