The Ribboned Rose

• Artist: max_8814
• Description: this is a poem i wrote. Please use constructive critisism. this is a freestyle poem so it doesnt have to rhym
  
• Date: 01/26/2009
• Tags: ribboned rose beauty love max8814

As I show myself to the red velvet rose bud
it blossums and releases its secrets and beauty
As a masquito to a light I find myself drawn ever more closer to the ribboned rose.
As I grow to love this rose the thought of gaining a knew closer relationship creeps through the back of my head.
I however will not risk what i have gained.
If the black rose retreats as my cold request approaches it will be the death of me.

Comments

[adek_wolf]

really good.
kudos!!

[Smexxi_Muzik_Lover_99]

I luv it and it does have a lot of feeling great job max...

[xxshroomie]

i like it
it has a lot of feeling
good job

[ashleyxhale]

i like it i think i may know what it means but im not shure.

[max_8814]

This was a mixture of my own dream and my writing skills. If you think you know what it meens PM me.

[Amy the Gothic]

i enjoyed it until u lost me which was after the 2nd sentence. j/k