Your greatest Mistake

• Artist: _Roooose_
• Description:
• Date: 01/18/2009
• Tags: your greatest mistake

I am nothing in your eyes
A name without a face
A simple lapse of judgement
A mouth without a taste
I am just another day
I was a body you could boast
I am the night you drank away
I am the taste you miss the most
I was the glisten in your eye
The girl with a pretty face
The dove whom had to fly
I am your Greatest Mistake.

Comments

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

Sigh, depressing, but good. Has an even flow to it.

[rewind r e w i n d]

I love that snappy ending sort of feeling you put on it. It makes a silent pause of awe after the last line is read.

[Gerard_Ray_Frank]

This is really good!

[Kibroth]

Good word usage, you really are a natural at descriptive word choice.

With a little work, I think this would jump from good to excellent (I'll PM you my suggestions).

Please post more and whatever you do, don't stop writing.

-K