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its all our falt were to blame
now all our fates will be the same
the air so thick it is smothering
now no time fore care and mothering
the end of the world is god's demand
all of our ends in his hands
no one pure,no one saved
our path to hell brightly paved
the human race is the reason
for all this pain it should be treason
so i say good bye c'ya soon
the darkest hour our time is non
it is now time and donnt you worry
you must go ,u must hury
find the ones u love wile you quiver i fear
and shead ur last and final tear
now i say that i must go
the flames of the fire clearly show
i can not breath theirs too much smoke
this is not some kind of hoax
my death and ur death are realy the same
their now is no such thing as fame
- Title: the end
- Artist: jarr44
- Description: bout the end of the world ... u shod c
- Date: 01/04/2009
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Comments (6 Comments)
- MaxBloodlust - 04/01/2009
- sup man that waz awesome
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- NakedJack - 01/08/2009
- With all that being said: True it could use some work but it would only be aesthetic. Its a powerful message. His death is my death. If no one or nothing could save him, what hope do I have? Its all of our fault, we chose to inflict suffering on others. No time for mothering, everyone is going to be watching out for themselves. God is destroying us and no one is saved, a force like god but isn't judging. Very enjoyable read.
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- NakedJack - 01/08/2009
- Its funny how everyone just criticizes the work they see, does anyone enjoy reading and writing poetry for more than their own vain pursuits? Something to lord over another or attract fans. Outside of "Awesome" what does the average gaian have to say about poetry, nothing. Does it not mean anything to you?
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- oldaccount byenow - 01/07/2009
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"the human race is the reason
for all this pain and for no reason"
if the human race is the reason for all the pain, why do you put 'and for no reason' the human race must of done something to cause it so there must be a reason
and you just rhymed the same word with itself there
unlovedtreehugger - it doesnt HAVE to rhyme but most people do rhyming poems because they are really good at it - Report As Spam
- unlovedtreehugger - 01/05/2009
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another rhyming.
Why does it have to rhyme?
Hello? FREE VERSE.
It works better. - Report As Spam
- XPeanutButter_DangorousX - 01/04/2009
- thats a very awsome poem
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