what you doesn't hurt me

• Artist: Porcelain Cupcakes
• Description: this is a small poem i wrote out of anger. it may not sound great to you, but i hope that the point is made. plz, don't critisize(spell check) it. it is not really a big attempt to plz everyone it is just how i felt at that time. if i make a mistake plz tell me in a nice way. i am more likely to take in your advice when it is said nicely. plz cooment, if not don't bother to rate it.
• Date: 01/03/2009
• Tags: doesnt hurt

Though you may say whatever comes out of your head/ I will not dwell upon your clichéd remarks/
though you may think of all of your condemnations that were said/ broke me, but I express my feelings through admirable art/ now I will tell you why you are thinking I am torn inside / I am telling that it is only your delusional point of view/ so you are basically squandering your precious time/ and I could careless, to tell you truth/ you may think that I am only showing you disrespect/ which isn’t at all my intention/ so you may think that that is all you can expect/ but there shouldn’t be any confusion/ you may think you have the competence/ to take I everything that I love/ but that is really nonsense/ because that action hasn’t given you a good response/ you may think that all the things you say are smart and clever/ but you have such a low vocabulary/ but you can’t think of anything much better/ so maybe you should hit a dictionary/ all of the things you attempt/ couldn’t hurt me in a century/ nevertheless, that you haven't got enough yet/ so you should try something else of the contrary/ maybe if you didn’t hate yourself at all/ you wouldn’t have to attempt to bring me down/ so please get off of your pedestal / and let me wear the crown/ if you cannot comprehend the advice I am trying to give you/ you may want to get some help/ because you seriously have some issues/ and you are only hurting yourself/ I hope what I am telling you / you truly understand / because that's the only time i'll tell you, not even once more/ I am going to put this poem to an end/ because I am tired of repeating myself and I am now bored/

Comments

[ll Tears of Joy ll]

This is very good
I would never think to critisze it
Its perfet the way it is
Some parts made me smile like the end and the dictionary part
5/5
amazing

[The Judged Book]

This is good though. You must have been really mad. D:

It reminds me of the "hate" poem I posted yesterday.

And don't worry about what other people think. As long as you like it, that's all that matters.