my friend

• Artist: 1saxdude
• Description: well its a lil poem i made a while ago, its not the best but its a start! enjoy!
• Date: 01/01/2009
• Tags: friend memories happiness

Another day is passing
And one can only say,
How life is always changing
but friends are here to stay.

Through the good and through the bad
Together we look back at the times we had
The smiling and laughing under the sun
Remembering the memories of all the fun.

You my friend are very special to me,
I pray to the Lord that this will be,
That we will be together for the times to come,
As we remember the memories we had under the sun.

Comments

[QUEEN_ OF_EVRIITHIN]

i do think that the title is a very importand part in writing a poem n its good to think outside the box when thinking of a title so i think if yu had chosen a better title then it would tell your audiance what exsactly their reading and could better understand the poem. i personaly think the title should have been "under the sun" you are very talented. keep writeing and over all well done!

[Agrikar the Hidden]

You know, a lot of the time I actually don't see poetry on here. I mean, sometimes there isn't flow, the words are jumbled, sometimes they even miss a few. You however have a good flow. It's short, but that doesn't matter in poetry, and it's rhythm is great, as well as the syntax. Keep up the good work. 5/5

[Agrikar the Hidden]

You know, a lot of the time I actually don't see poetry on here. I mean, sometimes there isn't flow, the words are jumbled, sometimes they even miss a few. You however have a good flow. It's short, but that doesn't matter in poetry, and it's rhythm is great, as well as the syntax. Keep up the good work. 5/5

[1saxdude]

thank you for the nice comments!

[skeleton panda]

its nice i like it

[fallin_dream15]

it was pretty good!! keep up the good work! write more biggrin