• hey i wrote a poem tell me what you think if u please.


    Take away the pain thats been forming in my brain
    pouring down like twilight rain
    I see my life winding down the drain
    hoping nobody hears the hint of strain in my voice
    feeling the weight and fearing the pain
    crashing down refusing to show
    I wont let them know
    as my strength begins to grow
    keeping the fear down below
    I wonder if they know
    I've got my arrow and my bow
    destined to stop the resounding crow
    readying my self for the impending blow of the next usual pain
    still feeling the pain that already came
    Thinking I have only myself to blame
    Even then I'm not the same
    so I sit here in this twilight rain
    feeling pain
    in my voice a hint of strain
    everything else is just ordained
    My cheeks are stained with red
    My bleeding eyes to blame
    everyone else looks the same
    I start to wish you never came
    But hoping you don't feel the same
    I see the picture frame by frame wondering if it would be the same
    If I had never been here to blame
    pain after pain its all the same
    I am not just some random Dame
    clinging to fame
    instead I Shy away from fame
    wishing i had never came
    can you take away the pain thats been forming in my brain
    As I let the twilight rain attempt to dround all of my pain

    so what do you think is it good sweatdrop comment fill me in